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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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There is no doubt that nowadays more chemicals a
re used in in
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are used in
food
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 production.Main motives of these substances to keep
food
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 for l
ong time but
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a long time, but
a long time but
these a
ffects
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affect
h
uman’s
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human
health. Before reaching to any conclusion some main points are to be considered.
Firstly
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, population is increasing day by day so demand of
food
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a
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lso rise.
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also rises
is also rising
has also risen
 To satisfied the demand of people farmer
u
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se
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uses
chemicals to produce more
food
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.
As a result
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 of it, these harmful substances detrimental to health of persons.
Furthermore
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, chemicals which are used f
or
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in
the
food
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 production, it r
educe
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reduces
the quality of
food
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.
For instance
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, low quality
food
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 diminished the nutritions as well as vitamins.
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, nowadays everyone is busy i
n
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with
their work schedules so they do not have enough time to cook
food
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. Due to
this
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, they always ready to eat packed
food
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.
Food
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 producers
use
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 preservative to preserve the
food
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 for l
onger time but
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a longer time, but
a longer time but
i
t
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
decline the natural value of
food
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. Apart from it, preserve
food
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 create s
ome
one or some or every or all without specification
any
health problem due to
use
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 of harmful chemicals in it. It a
ffect
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affects
m
etabolism system
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the metabolism system
of p
erson.
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a person
the person
people
 Every coin has two sides. There are some advantages
also
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. It is easily available and easy to cook. So, it h
elp
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helps
has helped
people to get everywhere.
Last
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 but not the least, producer gain more profit with the help of these chemicals because it produce more
food
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 so that it i
ncrease
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increases
the productivity. To conclude, Excess of everything is
bad s
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bad, so
o that manufacture should
use
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 chemicals in limit and individual should
also
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 prefer homemade
food
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 rather than packed
food
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