In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

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The movement of people from
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countryside
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the countryside
to cities is a common phenomena in almost all the countries and it is mainly due to the lack of employment opportunities and infrastructure facilities in the rural areas.
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, it will lead to
severe issue
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severe issues
like over crowding and unemployment in the urban areas. Admittedly,
this
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trend occurs due to the lack of developmental activities in the villages.
Although
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,
leaving
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
expenses in cities are higher, factor that attract people towards the towns are high paid jobs,
good
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better
education and medical aids and better quality of life. Myself being
epitome
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an epitome
the epitome
for
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of
that. I am basically from a rural
countryside
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place from Kerala after completing my
high
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higher
secondary education it was a must for me to relocate to
a
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an
urban area for my
teritiary
coming next after the second and just before the fourth in position
tertiary
education and job, as my community lack all these facilities.
Secondly
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,
this
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nature among the citizen will have a negative impact on both the communities. Due to the
dramatical
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dramatic
increase in urban population, it
will leads
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will lead
to unemployment, overcrowded traffic scarcity in infrastructure facilities like accommodation, medical and educational institutions. Whereas in the
countryside
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they will experience
shortage
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a shortage
in
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of
employees
form
a giver or sender
from
traditional jobs,
thus
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the framing land will become trash land,
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it leads to decline in quantity of agricultural products. To recapitulate, all
this
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phenomenon has to be considered as “blessing in disguise”
initially
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we
feels
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feel
good and eventually we will understand the consequences. In my way of thinking, it is the duty and responsibility of the government to provide more employment and infrastructure facilities in the
countryside
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to prevent the trend of people migration from rural to urban areas.
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