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The diagrams below gives information about the msnufscture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the informationand reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below gives information about the msnufscture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the informationand reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the production process of salted fish cakes which could be warmed in an oven, in
fact
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 the organic mixture is in a microwaveable container.
At
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 the beginning, it is delivered the primary products,
such
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 as fresh salmons and potatoes, even if they arrive in the industry
with
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a
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different
time
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: the first ones are brought every 12 hours or less,
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 the
second
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 ones every
one
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month. The fish is prepared in a different pale compared to vegetables.
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, the machine adds
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salmon, lemon juice and salt; after two employees remove skin and bones and another one checks their work.
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, the haddock is mixed with peas and sauce,
worked
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 before.
In meanwhile
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, the potatoes are cleared and peeled,
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 sliced and boiled. Chilli is added to them, for having a good taste.
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this
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 preparation,
the
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are
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 rested on
the
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top of the organic mixture. The pie is wrapped and
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 frozen,
thus
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 it is ready to be sold in each market in the UK.

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