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Nowadays, people make new friends with the use of social networks and internet chat groups. Some of the people think this is good. other people thinks that face-to-face conversations is beneficial. discuss both sides.

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In the past few decades, people made new friends by using social networks and internet chat groups. Some of them think
this
 is acceptable, but others believe that face-to-face conversations are beneficial. While I don't agree that making new friends through social networks are good, but I believe that there are some advantages for having a friend by social media.
Firstly
, making a friend utilizing social media can be unsecured for our private life.
For example
, there are so many people in social networks that use other people's picture and show them as its their picture. We can't understand if they real or not they might persuade us.
In addition
, we upload our photos, opinions and videos to our social media accounts so others can see and use it against the others.
For instance
, if we start chatting with a stranger, they can use our hobbies and favourite stuff for impressing us and if we believe them, we are able to send some private information and pictures to them. Because of the fact that, we sent the pictures by our hands, we did not have anything to do. In contrary, social media affect the society in a positive way,
such
 as they can meet new people in other foreign countries and chat with them where and whenever they want.
In addition
, they are able to develop not only our language skills, but
also
 our self confidence with foreigners.
For instance
, the main problem of talking a foreign language is that people don’t want to talk if they aren’t a fluent and faultless person so that a person can chat and expand their language and vocabulary skills and by using the video camera they can discuss some topics to be a more fluent speaker. To sum up, there are some pros and cos while using the social networks to make good friends, but people must control their private life and do not share personal information to the public, but if they need the social media beneficially, they can develop their personal skills by using it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Convenience
  • Anonymity
  • Socially anxious
  • Introverts
  • Diverse cultures
  • Perspectives
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Body language
  • Facial expressions
  • Emotional bonds
  • Trust
  • Meaningful interactions
  • Sustained conversations
  • Distractions
  • Social skills
  • Effective communication
  • Empathy
  • Active listening
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