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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #sites #people #canada #summarise #features #comparisons
The bar chart gives information about
number
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a number
the number
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 of (percentage of ?) people who used multiple social networking
sites
 in Canada in 2014 and
in
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apply
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2015.
Overall
,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of using one site in both years had the highest amount of usage.
Beside
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 the least amount of people chose using 5
sites
. 22 % of people had tendencies using no
sites
 in 2014 and
this
 percentage was going up
only
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by only
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 1 % in 2015. Another
information
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piece of information
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 as we can see from the chart
that
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is that
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 there was only
2
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a 2
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% differentiation between
who
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those who
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 used 5
sites
 and had the lowest part as
apposed
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opposed
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 to other
usages
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users
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. Using multiple
sites
 one to five was decreasing
among
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over
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 the years. There was a
slightly
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slight
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 fall in
y axis
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y-axis
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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