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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 Line
graph
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 visualises the
number
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 of people travelling in an underground station in London which
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showcase
Correct subject-verb agreement
showcases
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 additional information
comprises
Wrong verb form
comprised
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 with it. Usually, the Line
graph
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 has two relative aspects of the data.
Likewise
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, here
also
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 they took
Correct article usage
the passengers
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passengers
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passenger
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 count and the
Time
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 from 6:00 to 22:00 which shows the
number
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 of people travel in the particular
time
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. These passengers numbers were taken in an underground station in London. At 8:00, There were around 400 people using
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 underground station But at 6:00 and 16:00 there were few in
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 nearly 100. Along
this
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graph
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, It was more fluctuated and don't have any steady
number
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 unlike in a few hours between 11:30 and 14:00. The given line
graph
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 which starts increasing in the early morning, decrease after 8:00 and
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 again start to increase after 10:00 but not as same in the beginning of the day. After the few hours of the increase it starts maintain a steady plateau for the two hours.
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, There were a more fluctuation found in post mid
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 on comparing with the pre mid
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. Even Though it got to fall after 18:00, After it reaches the 20:00 it starts to rise up. Despite of the
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 it comprises that there were
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 some passengers are there who travel in the late night. At the
last
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 hour
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 the
number
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 is not at all less than the starting
number
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. To summarise
this
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graph
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, Even they have more variation in their count, It always maintains a considerable count in spite of their
time
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, number, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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