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Companies should encourage employees who work in a high position to leave at the age of 55 in order to give opportunities to the new generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Companies should not persuade senior level employees to resign at the age of 55, so that the new generations can get more opportunities. In my view, I completely disagree that retirement should be enforced as these senior individuals have a good amount of
experience
 which could help them in guiding the new generation. The high level people in the
company
 have a huge amount of
experience
. The
company
 needs to have people with
such
 high calibre in the office so that, they can with their
experience
 can take the
company
 to new levels of growth. To illustrate, the CEO of a well know software
company
 is 59 years old, but with his
experience
 he has been increasing the turnover of the
company
 on a year on year basis. The senior people play an important in driving and taking the
company
 way forward.
In addition
, their
experience
 can
also
 be used to guide the new generation.
For example
, a child learns from his parents the most simple of things, when he is guided by them. So
similarly
, the new generations can learn and be guided by the seniors, as the senior possess a high level of knowledge and
experience
.
Furthermore
, the new generation is very impulsive in decision making. By the guidance of the senior they can learn about making a more thoughtful decision. To conclude, the expertise and the
experience
 of the seniors can be used to guide the newcomer over the years, which can be very
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for the
company
 in the long run.
Hence
, the
corporate
Suggestion
corporation
 should not encourage the seniors to retire before their retirement age and rather use their skill sets.

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