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Today , the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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In the modern era advertising of popular
consumer
 goods could be a game changer as compared to
real demands
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the real demands
 of the local communities in which they are sold.
This
 essay will discuss why I partially agree with the given statement and discuss the possible reasons. The primary reason involves that
advertising
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advertises
are
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being
 vital for the manufacturer to sale their products in the
consumer
market
. Even though, that the supplier is paying heavy money for their advertisements to run on TV advertisements or on social media.
For instance
, if
demand
 of certain car supplier goes down there is no point of the supply of these cars in
market
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the market
, which in result could bring them loss financially to the car company.
Therefore
, a supplier could use advertising as a marketing strategy to boost their sales output and somehow could improve the reputation in the
market
. The Secondary reason involves the involvement of the local communities to decide upon their real needs.
This
 has to be done with the phenomena of “Supply and
Demand
 “
.
Accept space
.
 The Supply and
demand
 strategy is used by the suppliers to monitor an equilibrium and balance in the
consumer
market
 In the early 1980’s, there is suddenly a huge
demand
 of computers and the supply was less than the
demand
. So, the consumers in the society
decides
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decide
 themselves what to buy and what not to buy, depending on their real needs. While
government
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the government
 could play their role as a
regulator
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regulatory
 agency and the society must adhere to those rules and regulations
In
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At
 the conclusion, Advertising could play a major role in day to day needs of
consumer
 demands, but it is the local communities who decide their basic necessities.
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