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Many family moves to different countries. Some people think children can benefit from this, while others consider it is hard for children if families move to a foreign country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that it is beneficial for children when their parents relocate to other countries;
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, others believe that it can affect minors negatively. Personally, I think that there are more benefits
to
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of
mobing
in motion
moving
 to another
country
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 than drawbacks. On the one hand, it is considered that relocating to another state is good for children, and I completely agree.
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 is because they usually acquire more
opportunities especially
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opportunities, especially
 if a family moves from a developing
country
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 to a developed one.
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 change can be stressful, of course, but in the long run, the children will have a chance for a better childhood and all experiences associated with
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 period of their life: a high-quality education, healthcare, and so on. They will
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 get familiar with a new culture and make new friends who will introduce them to the customs and traditions of the new place.
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, children have less difficulty acquiring a new language, so the transition to a new culture will be smoother.
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, it is claimed that children might suffer negative consequences if their parents decide to move to another
country
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.
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 opinion is
suppored
sustained or maintained by aid (as distinct from physical support)
supported
spurred
support
 by the fact that the children are usually deeply connected to their home environment because of their friends and other relatives, and unfamiliar places scare them.
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, for some children, it might be difficult to accept a new place because of how tightly they are connected to their hometown or
homecountry
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home country
, which might result in sadness and even depression. In conclusion, while people's opinions on
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 topic may vary, I believe that it is advantageous for children to move to another
country
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 since
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 way they stand a better chance to have good education, and it will
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 allow them to meet new people and accept a new culture.

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