The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.

The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.
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The flowchart demonstrates the steps involved in making goods for consumers, followed
a
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process
through which information is sent back to
initial
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stages for improvements and modifications throughout the
process
. (30) The
process
of
product
formation begins with the purchase of raw materials and manufactured components which are kept in storage until the
production
process
is planned. The
production
planning stage involves
product
research and design. The
process
is carried through the stages of assembly, inspection, testing and packaging of the final
product
.
Finally
, the
product
is dispatched for
sales
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to the consumers. (62)
On the other hand
,
Production
planning provides
feedback
for storage.
Similarly
, sales provide
feedback
for both
production
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planning and market research, which in turn provides
feedback
for advertising and packaging.
Similarly
, both market research and testing provide
feedback
for design. In conclusion, the manufacturing of customer goods is a continuous
process
and involves
large
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number of steps,
while
feedback
is obtained from certain steps of
process
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the process
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randomly. (27)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, product, production, feedback with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer goods manufacturing
  • stages
  • diagram
  • information feedback
  • adjustment
  • raw material extraction
  • processing
  • component manufacturing
  • assembly
  • packaging
  • overview
  • feedback loop
  • summarize
  • main points
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