The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.

The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.
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The graph illustrates per head
consumption
of three fast food items in grams in
UK
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the UK
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between 1970 and 1990. (19)
Overall
, the
consumption
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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and
fish
or
chips
shows an increasing trend
while
the
consumption
of
pizza
shows a decreasing trend during
this
interval of twenty
years
. Between 1970 and 1980, the
consumption
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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and
fish
or
chips
went up smoothly from 20
gram
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grams
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(20g) to 100g and from 95g to 150g respectively.
While
the utilization of
pizza
went down gradually from 300g to just over 200g by 1980. In the
next
ten
years
, the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
rose dramatically high to 600g. The
consumption
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
show examples
first increased steadily from 1981 to 1985 and
then
rose sharply in the
second
half of
this
interval.
However
, the
consumption
of
pizza
declined smoothly in the first five
years
and
then
becomes stable at about 100g in the
last
five
years
. (133)
Thus
,
fish
and
chips
remained the most consumed junk foods in Britain by 1990
while
the popularity of
pizza
decreased steadily in the first fifteen
years
. (26)
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, chips, pizza, years, g with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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