The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.
The graph illustrates per head
consumption
of three fast food items in grams in UK
between 1970 and 1990. (19)
Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
, the consumption
of hamburger
and Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
fish
or chips
shows an increasing trend while
the consumption
of pizza
shows a decreasing trend during this
interval of twenty years
. Between 1970 and 1980, the consumption
of hamburger
and Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
fish
or chips
went up smoothly from 20 gram
(20g) to 100g and from 95g to 150g respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
grams
While
the utilization of pizza
went down gradually from 300g to just over 200g by 1980. In the next
ten years
, the consumption
of fish
and chips
rose dramatically high to 600g. The consumption
of hamburger
first increased steadily from 1981 to 1985 and Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
then
rose sharply in the second
half of this
interval. However
, the consumption
of pizza
declined smoothly in the first five years
and then
becomes stable at about 100g in the last
five years
. (133)
Thus
, fish
and chips
remained the most consumed junk foods in Britain by 1990 while
the popularity of pizza
decreased steadily in the first fifteen years
. (26)Submitted by furqantaseer.ntu on
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