Some people think that computer games are bad for children, while others believe that they are useful. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of computer games and give your opinion

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Some would argue that online games are not good for kids, while others would say that it can be advantageous. While online games can improve

language

skills for children,

refers to the speaker or writer

believe that it can lead to unhealthy

life-style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyles

lifestyle

.   On the one had, Computer games can teach a

young

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younger

one a

secong

coming next after the first in position in space or time or degree or magnitude

second

language

from

very early age

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a very early age

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other words, when a child play games with other individual from different country, they can learn a

second

language

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authentic context.

This

learning would be much more enjoyable comparing with educational institutes as children learn faster when they enjoy.

As a result

, they

autometically

in a reflex manner

automatically

develop a skill unknowingly which might be used as

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extra skill later in life.

For example

, my brother developed his English

language

skills by playing Counter Strike at online and for that he

become

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becomes

successfull

having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome

successful

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his workplace as he effectively communicated with foreign buyers.  

On the other hand

, Internet games can force a kid to lead an unhealthy life. The

addictiveness

power to be effective; the quality of being able to bring about an effect

effectiveness

addicts

this

kind of games

are

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so strong that some kids continue playing them for

extended period

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extended periods

an extended period

of times without

evan

used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected

even

participating in any other activity. As a

resuly

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

result

, they lose interest to do any physical activity which

lead

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leads

them to gaining weight. Eventually, they gain fat and develop different weight related diseases

such

as, breathing problem and others.

For instance

, according to WHO 90 percent of urban

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

are suffering from obesity as they are not interested in outdoor games, which clearly implies the dangerous side of video games. In conclusion, while games can prepare a kid for future

carrier

the particular occupation for which you are trained

career

with

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extra skill set,

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consider that it can

ruine

an irrecoverable state of devastation and destruction

ruin

ruined

their health and cause them major harm.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people think that computer games are bad for children, while others believe that they are useful. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of computer games and give your opinion

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or you feel children have enough education at school?