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The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
chart
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 identifies the percentage of
volunteers
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 who worked in
sport
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 organization
whereas
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 the pie
chart
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 demonstrates distinctive volunteer jobs were done in New Zealand in 2010. Information is divided into four types of families in the bar
chart
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 and by dissimilar types of volunteer jobs in the pie
chart
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.
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, the majority of
volunteers
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 were
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a couple
the couple
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couple
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couples
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 with children and the popularity of the group who worked as a coach, instructor or teacher were highest from other
roles
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 over the period given. The figures suggest an impossible association between the number of
roles
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 which were dedicated to people and the percentage of
volunteers
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 in all groups. Lone
person
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persons
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 least preferred to work in
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sport
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sports
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 organizations with 10.9%
while
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 other households were 1.5 more than the previous group.
In addition
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, around half of
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volunteers
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the volunteers
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 were
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a group
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group
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groups
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 of families
who
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apply
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couple
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coupled
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 with no dependent children. The most popular
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roles
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role
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 in
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sport
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the sport
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center
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centre
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was
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were
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 teaching with 206000 people whilst
referee
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the referee
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 or umpire showed little interest in support
roles
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. Committee
member
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members
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 or
administrator
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administrators
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 dedicated about
one fourth
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one-fourth
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 of a whole but
scorer
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scorers
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 or
timekeeper
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timekeepers
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 just over doubled in comparison to the medical
sport
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 or other which was around 62700.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, volunteers, sport, roles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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