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Traffic congestion solution is offering a free transport system. What is your opinion

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It is thought by some people that the increasing traffic could be mitigated by providing free public transport facilities.
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, I disagree with
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 opinion, as
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 would be a temporary solution and there are several other methods that could be helpful in order to cope up with
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 situation.
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 of all,
this
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 would not be able to reduce the number of cars on the road, which are the main cause of traffic.
Free service
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The free service
 will only attract lower economic class people and would make the buses crowded.
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, it is hard to assume that the wealthy people would ever choose overly crowded public buses for commuting.
Secondly
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, complementary public transportation would not be a lasting solution, as there is a possibility that the
government
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 may soon
ran
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run
 out of money as it is difficult to maintain
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 services for
long time
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a long time
 for developing countries like India, which has other issues that needs to be cleared.
As a result
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, it
will disturbs
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will disturb
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's budget as the
government
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 has to put a lot of money in funding
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 schemes. The same money,
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, could be used more wisely,
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, in increasing and improving public buses, constructing better roads and funding awareness campaigns for encouraging people to use public transport. To conclude, I strongly believe that complementary public transport would not be a lasting solution to mitigating traffic.
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, the
government
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 needs to look out for viable and permanent methods to solve
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 issue.

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