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Some countries reduce inner-city traffic by increasing public transport. Others impose a tax on people who drive in the city

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Few countries are taking measures to reduce
traffic
 congestion by imposing a
tax
 on
people
 who drive in the city and encouraging
people
 to
use
 public
transport
instead
.
This
 essay will
firstly
 discuss, how usage of more public
transport
 will benefit the country as the biggest advantage.
Secondly
,
how
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forcing
people
 to pay a high
tax
 for driving the car
as
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is
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 a disadvantage.
Due to
 the increase in population,
people
 are facing many adverse effects on the environment. One
such
 thing is air pollution. When
people
use
 their own
vehicle
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vehicles
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for
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to
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 commute, they are explicitly contributing to
traffic
, which in turn causes more air pollution.
Instead
, if
people
use
 public
transport
,
traffic
 congestion can be controlled
and
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making the environment
more
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a more
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 reliable place to live.
On the other hand
, imposing the
tax
 may benefit the government but not
for
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the
people
.
Places
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In places
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 where public
transport
 is not of high frequency,
people
 are forced to
use
 their own vehicle and for the local commute,
people
 cannot rely on public
transport
 all the time.
People
 with low monthly wages will suffer a lot,
due to
 the increase in the
tax
, as
this
 will be an additional cost to them. In conclusion, using more public
transport
 is a really good plan to reduce
traffic
 but the government should address those issues before imposing the
tax
, so
people
 from different classes will get benefited.
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