IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#internet #improvements #people #goods #services
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Owing to the advancements in the internet, most of the e-commerce sites these days provide a facility for the users to share the feedback about the purchased products.
Although
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
 can sometimes misguide the consumers, in my perspective, it is beneficial as it helps the buyers to check the credibility of the
product
Use synonyms
. Admittedly, the facility of
online reviewing system
Suggestion
the online reviewing system
an online reviewing system
 is misused by many producers. The reason for
this
Linking Words
 is, in order to increase the sales of the items they make use of fake positive reviews and opinions which many a
time
Suggestion
times
 misguide the consumers. As most of the end-users prefer to buy the
product
Use synonyms
 with more rating and positive feedback. To exemplify, a start-up mobile company 'Juno' fooled thousands of people throughout India with the help of misleading and false reviews of their non-smart and low-quality mobile phones.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
, despite the aforementioned drawback, online sharing of opinions on
purchased
Suggestion
purchasing
 goods is advantageous as it can provide a better insight into the
product
Use synonyms
 quality. With
this
Linking Words
 platform people who have already purchased the item can openly share their good or bad experience of using the
product
Use synonyms
.
Consequently
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 will not only help the other buyers to analyse the effectiveness of the
item but
Accept comma addition
item, but
also
Linking Words
 make the selection of
Use synonyms
product
Suggestion
the product
products
 easy.
For instance
Linking Words
, in the global
marketing ranking
Accept comma addition
marketing, ranking
 of the end-user facilities provided by the e-
commercial
Suggestion
commerce
 sites, Amazon's rating facility on each good and service is ranked
first
Linking Words
, as it facilitates the users to buy the best item. In conclusion, while there are some instances where an unauthorized feedback system can be misleading, in my opinion, the overall review system is a benefit for the end-users as it allows them to analyse the quality of goods.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: