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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
There is no
boubt
the state of being unsure of something
doubt
 that these days the climate is
chnging
marked by continuous change or effective action
changing
 a lot,
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 the human and government makes many action
impact
Suggestion
impacts
 on the weather. The question is, can we find a way to live with
this
 argument?. In
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am going to explain my view and draw my personal conclusion. In
tearms
status with respect to the relations between people or groups
terms
 of some reasons which makes climate
chang
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
change
.
Firstly
, is a global
warmaing
the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature
warming
warning
. The
globel
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
waming
the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature
warming
women
become
Suggestion
becomes
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 man's activities. When the human
bulding
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
 the factory in
area
Suggestion
the area
an area
 has many trees and population
,
Accept space
,
 the
smok
a cloud of fine particles suspended in a gas
smoke
 from the factory hurts the atmosphere.
Also
, if the
countris
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
controls
counties
 have
traffic crowded
Accept comma addition
traffic, crowded
, the
soke
a cloud of fine particles suspended in a gas
smoke
 from
car
Suggestion
the car
also
 impacts on the climate.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
, the carbon
dioxed
an oxide containing two atoms of oxygen in the molecule
dioxide
 produced by gases or fossil fuels
,
Accept space
,
 it is the
maen
most important element
main
 reason to
increased
Suggestion
increase
 the
globel
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
 warming and temperature degrees. So, the individual should be
cooprate
act as a barrier between; stand between
separate
 on
reduce
Suggestion
the reduce
reduction
reducing
 of carbon rate by limiting the use of their vehicles and
consming
very intense
consuming
 energy in
factores
a plant consisting of one or more buildings with facilities for manufacturing
factories
.
More over
in addition
Moreover
, the
globel
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
 warming will be dangerous in
future
Suggestion
the future
. To illustrate, the
increaseing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
 on
temperatue
(of weather or climate) free from extremes; mild; or characteristic of such weather or climate
temperate
temperature
 hurts plants and makes the ice
is melting
Suggestion
melt
.
That is
 mean, the level sea is rising in
neare future
Suggestion
the near future
near future
 and the is didn't a good news to our lives,
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 the most cities are close to sea and
oction
something done (usually as opposed to something said)
action
. So, when level sea
incrasing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
, many flooding will happen. In
conclsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
consolation
, in my opinion, we should
keeping
Suggestion
keep
oue
of or belonging to us
our
 environment by
prevent
Suggestion
preventing
 the
resaons
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
Russians
reason
 which hurts it
,
Accept space
,
 so
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 don't agree with
this
argumant
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
argument
arguments
 that we should find a way to live with it
.
Accept space
.
 We should
did
Suggestion
do
some thing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 to solving
this
 issue.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
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  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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