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Some people think that renewable energy sources like solar and wind power should replace fossil fuels such as coal and gas as soon as possible. Others think we should continue to use fossil fuels while it is still cheap to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays it is generally accepted as scientific fact that fossil fuels (
such
 as coal and gas) are harmful for the environment.
This
 is borne out in daily life,
for
example many
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example, many
 countries suffer from serious pollution, which not only reduces people’s quality of
life but
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life, but
also
 creates a lot of additional problems for governments,
such
 as the citizens’ health.
As a result
, many people believe that we should not delay in switching to renewable
energy
 sources, which are clean and do not have the negative effects of fossil fuels. No matter the extra cost in the short term, if it improves people’s life quality and stops them
getting sick it
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getting sick, it
 will be worthwhile.
In addition
, if there was a strong effort to stop using fossil fuels, governments and businessmen would invest a lot of money to produce
energy
 from renewable sources. In the long term, increased competition in the industry would lead to prices would come down, creating new jobs, reducing people’s fuel bills and stimulating the economy.
On the other hand
, it cannot be denied that it would not be easy to completely avoid the use of fossil fuels in the near future. For one thing, a sharp rise in the price of
energy
 would place a heavy burden on people’s budgets.
Furthermore
, there is still a large supply of coal, oil and gas that
has not been used
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have not been used
, and many countries’ economies depend on the sale of these resources to maintain their standard of living. For these reasons, it will not be easy to get rid of them completely. Overall, I think it is best to have a process where fossil fuels are gradually replaced by renewable
energy
 sources, so that different countries can prepare their societies and economies at the pace
that is
 appropriate for them.
Submitted by nandhinig on

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