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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do a different kind of jobs. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #change #career #life #jobs
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It is argued by a significant number of individuals that alteration in
career
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 is more appropriate for a
candidate
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 and at least one
change
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 should be taken during professional
life
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. I completely agree with the idea and believe that
this
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 will
increasing
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increase
 the learning of an individual and enhance interest in professional
life
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.
To begin
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 with,
change
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 in
career
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 at once plays a vital role to bring back the energy in monotonous
life
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. Mostly every profession has a saturation stage, in which the individuals feels
bore
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bored
boring
 and dull with their daily routine and repetition of work.
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Therefore people
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Therefore, people
 should try the approach of changing
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career at
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career, at
 once, it will teach them many things which they have not learnt from their previous profession and creates interest in daily activities.
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,
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change
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changes
a change
 in professional
career
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 is vital to make the
life
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 bright and
colorful
having striking color
colourful
.
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, joining another field in
career
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 makes the
person multi
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person, multi
-skilled and advanced in
this
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 competitive world. Working with other field will provide the opportunity to add up the experience and talent level.
For example
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, various organizations prefer to interchange their employees in different departments to make them competitive and strong
candidate
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 for higher roles,
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 as,
candidate
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 having knowledge of production and quality is a strong
candidate
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 for research and development department of
company
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the company
a company
.
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, people should
change
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 their
career
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 at least once if possible to build their
career
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 profile. To conclude, I agree that professionals should modify their
career
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 path at once in
life
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 due to the reasons mentioned in
above paragraphs
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the above paragraphs
. In
future
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the future
, as the competition is growing, the multi-talented people will be in more demand.

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