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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Why?

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Hydrocarbon fuels
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 as coal and gas are the primary
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 source across the globe, but people are now being persuaded to utilise renewable energy sources as the alternative. I believe that
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 beneficial development, as they will help us in curbing
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 and because they are
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-effective replacements. Replacing traditional electricity generation with solar, wind, tidal or geothermal is a positive development because they reduce
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.
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 is to say that these renewable resources do not have any carbon emissions, and by implementing them, we can control the carbon footprint
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 our environment and the damages done by petroleum, in turn bringing a good
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 across the world.
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, a research conducted by Germany’s Ministry of Natural Resources stated that, by replacing the coal-based
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 plants with electricity-generating wind stations, they observed that the carbon-di-oxide in the atmosphere was reduced by 50%, which is substantially positive for the
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. Renewable sources bring a productive
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 because they are free in comparison with fossil fuels, which are expensive and the
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 of implementing a
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 production system using them is economical. Unlike coal and gas, whose prices are usually controlled by the international market, the energy from solar and wind can be harnessed without any
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, because they are naturally available throughout the world.
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, their recurring maintenance
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 is
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minimum
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minimized
, and that takes a huge burden off the economy.
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, the annual operating
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 of a 2000 MW coal
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 station is 150 million pounds,
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, the yearly charges of a solar park of equal capacity are as low as 30 million pounds. In conclusion, I believe that solar and winds are a suitable alternative to oil, coal, and gas and using them is a welcomed
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 as they mitigate
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 issues and primarily because they are economically viable.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • alternative energy sources
  • wind energy
  • solar energy
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • environmental benefits
  • reduction of greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy
  • energy independence
  • energy security
  • cost challenges
  • infrastructure challenges
  • reliability issues
  • intermittency issues
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