People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Human

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as a part of nature become weak and old, so they need to be cared

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others. A large group of old people are not maintained by their families but in recent years,

care

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centers

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like

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and nursing

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home

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are

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have been

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established

for

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to

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take caring them

that

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and

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these places have been welcomed by families.

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essay will highlight both the benefits and drawbacks that result from

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an approach.

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will positive, a significant

advantages

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is that looking for elderly people in

care

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homes

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home

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or nursing

houses

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homes

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is more time-efficient for families because

now a days

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nowadays

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all members of family work or study out of

home

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and nobody can stay and take

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them

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Beside

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time-efficiency

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time efficiency

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, old people’s health and safety are provided by

care

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or nursing

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home

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example

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doctors and nurses are always present to help them in case of emergency. From an opposite angle,

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trend

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has many

disadvantage

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like feeling lonely for old parents or grandmother or grandfather because they are separated from their family and friends

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some of

old

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parents used to

be stay

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at

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alone but despite

of

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having facilities which are available at

nursing

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house, they prefer to stay close their family. Another crucial disadvantage is

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the coast

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coast

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cost

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of caring

elderly

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for elderly

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people in

care

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home

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because these places provide room, meal and

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some activities and

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the coast

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coast

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cost

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of

maintaining

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is more than an old

person’s

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earn. By the way of conclusion, it can be deduced that despite the benefits of

elderly

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the elderly

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staying in nurse

hone

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homes

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, it can lead to depression and

including

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apply

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high

coast

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costs

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