The two pie charts show the percentages of pollutant entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007

The two pie charts show the percentages of pollutant entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007
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pie
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indictea
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indicate
tge
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the
proportion of various
pollutant
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pollutants
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which entered a special part of the
ocean
in the years
of
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1997 and 2007.
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, at the beginning of the
year
,
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a pollutant
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pollutant
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pollutants
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from
air
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the air
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contributed
most
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,
while
little had
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pollutant
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pollutants
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that entering in the
ocean
. In the comparison,
at the end
of the
year
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pollutant
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air
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and domestic sewage was the largest segment
caused
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that caused
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pollution in
ocean
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the ocean
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and the lowest contribution was made up
by
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litter and farm waste. On having the look at the graph, it is seen from the graph that domestic sewage and offshore oil
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in
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ocean
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the ocean
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increased significantly from 18% and 5% for the former
year
and 29% and 14% for the latter
year
.
However
, in 1997 and 2007,
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a pollutant
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pollutant
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pollutants
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from
air
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the air
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polluted the largest segment of the
ocean
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for 30% and drop slightly to 29
percent
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at the end
of the
year
. A similar
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was noticed in the case of industrial waste and marine where the figure decreased sharply
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by 8% and 9%, over the given period. One more
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noticeable
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noticable
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noticeable
feature of the chat is the percentage of farm water and litter
pollutant
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pollutants
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added
in
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ocean
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which has decreased by almost 2% from 1997 to 2007
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pollutant, ocean, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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