Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Free time represents the opportunity for many people to improve skills related to the mind and get better capacity by

doing

the act that results in something coming to be

making

simple games

such

as scrabbles and puzzle or by reading books.

Although

other believe that

this

period should be used to

rest

. I believe that both of

thes

plural of "this"

these

those

activities have a great effect on our mind

First

of all, intellectual games

such

as puzzle and

scrable

an aimless drawing

scrabble

help the development of new skills. By playing games people can learn without doing any effort new word, have better reflex and be more logical. They can

also

become

interest

Suggestion

interested

by science and history or

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

their imagination by reading a book. According to many teacher games is considered as an

education

Suggestion

educational

form particularly

Accept comma addition

form, particularly

for young children. They are ore concentrate and interest when they play than when they have to listen teacher and learn basic knowledge.

Consequetly

Suggestion

Consequently

, a lot of primary teacher use games to

explains

Suggestion

explain

mathematics and teach new vocabulary.

Therefore

, activities can be considered as

rest particularly

Accept comma addition

rest, particularly

for children who likes to be active. I am sure that leisure and reading books is more appropriate than just watching TV.

However

, after a long

day

of working and studying many people prefer to sleep. They are several

benefit

Suggestion

benefits

reliated

being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics

rest but

Accept comma addition

rest, but

refers to the speaker or writer

think the most common one is to regenerate itself for the

day

to be more

performant

a dramatic or musical entertainment

performance

at work or school. It is

also

a good way to avoid

headach

something or someone that causes anxiety; a source of unhappiness

headache

headaches

at the end of the

day

For instance

refers to the speaker or writer

am a post graduate student and generally after 9 hours class we have a lot of homework for the following

day

. So

refers to the speaker or writer

have to study for 4 hours

addionally

in addition, by way of addition; furthermore

additionally

ordinarily

and my fist need after

this

long

day

is go

Suggestion

is going

has gone

goes

to bed and certainly not to have leisure.

thus

Suggestion

Thus

, we will use our free time for our needs

Accept space

conslusion

a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration

conclusion

free time is the opportunity to do activities and develop more skills,

this

also

the occasion to have

rest

Suggestion

a rest

. Our choice will depend on our needs, people with a busy

day

will prefer to sleep wherease an other will do activities

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

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354 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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