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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Other believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer andd include any relevant examples from your own kowledge or experience

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Quite a few people consider that college students deserve to choose
subject
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subjects
 which they are fond of. It is the other way around, others insisted that students only supposed to select some
subject
 like science and technology that are beneficial for future life
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 Currently, most of
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the youngster
are saturated
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is saturated
 with passion about their ideals.
also
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Also
 realize that they have grown up with independent thoughts can pursue everything they like.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
 a multitude of students
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believes
 that nothing is more crucial than delight.To give a demonstration, in terms of parents, they always thought the major in art is unpromising and insubstantial.
Then
 some parents will try to convince their children to abandon in a variety of ways.As a matter of fact, parents should give them enough chance and encourage to support students who are really
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doing
 well in
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the drawing
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cultivate
 their potency and increase more talent in different aspect
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of
 the society. On the other hands,
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many, if
 not most students have plentiful plans for their own future
instead
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As
 they
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stretch
 their goal
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For
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instance, they
 desire to have a stable high income
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level
 and
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decent jobs
a decent job
. They will challenge the most arduous
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 regard to science and technology.
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Trying
 their best
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 keep assiduously
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on
 learning and overcome the difficulty
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In order to strive for a better quality life. By and large,…
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From
 my perspective, I will choose a
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 which I can easily
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find
 a job that suits me in the long future.

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