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the line graph below show the income of graduates student with different age in 2002 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the line graph below show the income of graduates student with different age in 2002 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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provides
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informations
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 about the
salary
 of graduates
student
 for a range of different age in 2002. The
salary
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salaries
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 of
the
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first-degree students
are
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 quite different from the other students. They start their career with the lowest
salary
 almost £350.
This
 remuneration increased gradually during the
next
 20
years
 until reach £690.
However
, their pay decreased slightly between 40 and 50
years
 old before to have a
steadily
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rise
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.
On the contrary
, the other
student
start
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 their work with approximately £410. They are
earning
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earnings
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 went up dramatically until 36-40
years
 old and finished with a remarkable
fell
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at the end
 of their career.
Moreover
, there was an
upgrade
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 trend for
higher
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a higher
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degree
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degrees
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. They began with
a
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pay
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payment
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 under £400 and increased sharply until 41-45
years
 old with £750 per month.
Then
, their
salary
 declined modestly to £720 for 15
years
.
Finally
, their remuneration increased considerably to £790 per month.
Overall
, the higher degree
student
start
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starts
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 their profession
one
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with one
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 of the lowest pay before
to know
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knowing
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 an upward trend and
finish
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finishing
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 their employment with the higher one.
At
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 the opposite of the other
student
, in spite of
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a significantly
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significantly
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significant
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 increase
they
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ended with the lowest
payment
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paid
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at
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in
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 the same position
with
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as
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 first-degree
student
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, student, years, hhh, hh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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