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The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph displays the
earnings
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 from exports of a particular nation in different categories during 2015 and 2016. The table illustrates how much change in terms of percentage happened in each exported category in 2016 in comparison with 2015.
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,
maximum
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the maximum
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 revenue
earned
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was earned
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 from the
export
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 of petroleum
products
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 in both 2015 and 2016,
whereas
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 the least revenue accounted for the
export
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 of
textiles
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 in both
the
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apply
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years. The percentage change in the
earnings
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 from
export
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 between the
year
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years
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 2015 and 2016 is maximum for
textiles
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,
while
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that is
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 minimum for agricultural
products
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. The revenue was maximum from the
export
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 of petroleum
products
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 in both
the
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years with just over $50 in 2015 and around $63 in 2016. Though the
earnings
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 were the least from the
export
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 of
textiles
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,
it
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they
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 increased from $27 to just over $30. Engineered goods, germs and jewellery and agricultural
products
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harvested
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were harvested
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nearly
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 $57, around $43 and just over $30 respectively in 2015 and just over $60, approximately $40 and around $31 respectively in 2016. The percentage variation in the
earnings
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 from
export
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 in 2016 compared to 2015 is maximum for
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textiles
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the textiles
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 category with a significant increase of 15.24% and is the minimum for
agricultural
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the agricultural
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products
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 category with a negligible increment of 0.81%. All the other categories varied slightly within the range of 3% and 5.18%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, export, products, textiles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 4 times.
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