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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he should get a job Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Say why he would not enjoy going to college Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him Suggest type of job that would be suitable for him

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Dear John, I hope you are in good health. I am really glad to know about the completion of your bachelor’s degree. I am eager to give you my suggestion regarding either join a postgraduate college or hunt a
job
. As far as my personal experience is concerned, it is quite boring and hectic to pursue postgrad studies without any break. I think
its
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 time for you to explore the
job
 market. As you wrote in the letter most of your friends are going to search for a
job
. So, you would not be able to enjoy the university and concentrate as well. I am sure that you have the ideal transcript and now you should search
the
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 appropriate
job
. In
this
way
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 you will be able to support your family.
However
, as far as
master’s
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a master’s
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 degree is concerned, working in
field
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 will provide you
the
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 best idea about your interest area and expertise. It will
also
 help you in choosing the subject to specialize in. As a bachelor in Business
administration
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 you have a wide range of
job
 types to work in. you can opt for corporate or research sector jobs. I know that you are fond of marketing, so I would suggest you
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some
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job
 as marketing manager
of
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 social media marketing advisor. Believe me, it will open up a whole new outlook upon you.
Moreover
, you will get better professional learning platforms. I hope my words will help you to put your mind in the right direction. Best of luck for
you
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 future. Regards Your Friend, Mark
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressures
  • financial burdens
  • tuition
  • student loans
  • uncertainty
  • work experience
  • earn money
  • practical skills
  • professional network
  • align with interests
  • growth opportunities
  • on-the-job training
  • apprenticeships
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