The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree

I partially agree parenting paves the path for better understanding social
life
. It
induce
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induces
positiveness in
child’s
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the child’s life
a child’s life
life
,
teachs
impart skills or knowledge to
teach
basic fundamentals of
life
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life, such
such
as how to lead the
life
peacefully and with full of tranquillity. Helps in changing the attitude of
child
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the child
a child
towards
society
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a society
where they mingle and share their excitement and dissidence. Commanding these skills solely depends upon on
parents guidance
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parents, guidance
parents' guidance
parents' parents' guidance
as they spend almost all time with
child
and their behaviour, attitude and body language will have
huge impact
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a huge impact
on them, free environment fulfil their wishes uninterruptedly and empower them to decide how to lead the
life
. Parents are imminent part of
child
development mentally and morally and disciplined obedient
child
adding cherry on the top
nevertheless
this
attributes propelling
child
in rightful direction and safeguarding them to indulge in offensive act which can invite ominous situation and probability to
embroiled
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embroil
themselves is high and coming out from it is bleak.
Childs
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The child
Child
Child's
Children
grasps the thing which
are
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is
beneficial to them and imbibes the gravity of involving in sinful act and is unforgivable. There
are
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is
immense illustration
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an immense illustration
for
gruesomeness
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the gruesomeness
of
crime
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crimes
conducted in society by
child
and unfortunately its increasing in pace seriously disturbing.
However proper
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However, proper
parenting
sometimes become
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sometimes becomes
futile in arresting the young people from engulfing in
crime
, now a days era is of modernity, flashy objects, be pompous in friends group and all these demand
money which
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money, which
they borrow from friends and lie to parents getting
money
, if they run out of
money
or
guradian
a person who cares for persons or property
guardian
refused to give monthly expense, they lose ethical consciousness and arranged the
money
from illegal sources pushing them to commit
crime
. Young people are having access to arms and ammunition, clubs, beers and other hazardous things and due to less maturity they inclined to buy these stuffs and unintentionally engrossed in illicit activit, I would like to site an example of united states where every month we watched news on television or social media that 100 people died on indiscriminate firing when the suspect name portrayed in media we shockingly watch teenager infringe the security gate of mall and fired mercilessly on shoppers and aftermath of attack the scene was nerve racking and can’t visualise and that young people who is culprit confessed in court that out of depression he fired the bullet here the question arise why the
crime
had happened because he was intended to commit
this
heinous he has no regret and does want from court to be absolved from
this
dreadful
crime
. In conclusion young people are solely responsible for their
life
.
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