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Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

#people #girls #husband’s #name #marriage #age #tradition
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A few hundred years ago, things were straightforward, when a man and a
woman
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 got married, the wife changed her
surname
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 to that of her
husband
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's
name
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. But nowadays they are matters of concern. I completely disagree with changing
woman
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's
surname
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, as I see that as a transfer of subservience from father to
husband
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, and losing of women's identities to that of men's. In the internet age, all the work that the
woman
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 did under her previous
name
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 is not going to show up in google search anymore. If someone is trying to track her down for job opportunities with previous
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,
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 it will be
tough time
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a tough time
 in finding her out as it
invloves
connect closely and often incriminatingly
involves
 lots of verification. A
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change
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 has lots of practical difficulties which
includes
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include
 changing in all government records, causing more
burdern
an onerous or difficult concern
burden
.
This
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 implicitly imposes her to lose her identity personally and
also
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 professionally. When it comes to marriage, one can
visibily
in a visible manner
visibly
 see the
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 is imposed mainly on women. She is expected to relocate to her
husband
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's place, leaving her family, job and everything behind. If a
woman
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's refuses to take up the
change
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, she will be considered as violating the tradition and not respecting the family and their culture. Women are expected to be communal, sacrificing their individual interests to the well-being of the family and having
husband
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's
name
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 as
surname
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 can be seen as selfish and forcing them to be the
change
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. It may seem easier to ask men to
change
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 their
surname
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 according to that of women, but it is always
invisble option
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an invisible option
invisible option
 and placing
burden
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the burden
a burden
 entirely on the women to take up the
change
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.
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 of
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 is solely
women's decision
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a women's decision
 and not of men's or their families.
thFamily
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ThFamily
 should respect the women's individuality and should not run behind the tag of
ownership
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owning
.== People should consider marriage is all about connection of two hearts, not a
name
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 changing event.
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