Each year, the crime rate increases. What do you think are the causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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A generation ago, people never used to lock their doors before going to sleep. The
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used to be zero to minimal.
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, there is an increasing trend in the
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each year as per a survey. In
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essay, I will intend to explore the issues for an increase in the
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and propose corresponding solutions as well. A wide range of factors contributes to the fact that it causes a higher
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. In the
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place, people in our society have high anticipation and ambition in their lives, they dream of being rich and multimillionaire. But some people try to achieve their goals through hard work and sincerity, unfortunately, while others tend to lean on shortcuts and quick-money path. Let's take Jordan D'Lorean
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, he was a general manager for GM in the 1980s and he had a dream of building his own car company. During
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path, he has done many illegal activities like drug trafficking, weapons to raise money as an investment for his company.
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is a clear indication that sometimes even our dreams can mislead to criminal activities.
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, the
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failed to teach people how to save their hard-earned money. Most of the people up to the middle class have no or fewer savings in their bank account, and on top of it, they have debts to be paid off to the bank.
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, the reason why there is an increasing trend in criminal activity is the fact that most of the jobs in the current market need a highly skilled profession.
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,
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week more than 3000 employees have been
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without proper compensation. Did the
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or the company ever think about how these people would survive? At some point, these people would fight hard to get a new job, while
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, there is a high probability they could indulge in criminal activities for surviving. Fortunately, based on the above reasonings, comprehensive solutions have been identified.
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, people need to set their ambitions at a responsible level.
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, split their long term vision into corresponding intervals of short term vision. By
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people would feel satisfied with their achievement and would feel content.
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, the
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needs to educate people on how to budget their
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assets in the form of money
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many could be saved from bankruptcy. Let's take Norway as a perfect example, the
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has introduced a financial budget course for high school student, I assume
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could be one way people would learn on
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, we need to limit ourselves from using robotic machines as
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leads to more unemployment. In conclusion,
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many people think that the
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is a standalone
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problem, but
there are many reasons why a person commits a
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. In my view, it is a combination of
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and people respond to tackle
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issue and they should begin by considering some of the solutions proposed above.

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