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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

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To be content with
ones
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one's
work
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 environment is a blessing many individuals seek in their
lives especiallly
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lives, especially
lives especially
 ones from cities with growing populations and industrialization. In my opinion, employment in developing economies, satisfaction within companies is becoming a rarity because of the competitive environment faced in the
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
.
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 essay will elaborate on why the happiness quotient is low and how increasing it is essential to ensure
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 in
ones
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one's
 career. In countries undergoing industrialization and infrastructure development, there is one constant factor which is
change
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changing
 because of which employees have to constantly adapt to the ever changing
evvironment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
. They have to
continuously
seemingly without interruption
continually
 upgrade their knowledge to stay competitive in the market place as the sheer number of individuals competing for the same position is high.
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 the vacancies in
organization
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the organization
an organization
organizations
is not growing
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are not growing
 at the same rate as the number of qualified individuals vying for the same job prospect, making the issue even more critical to tackle. Those already employed are in constant fear of losing their jobs because of making the situation overwhelming.
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, it is essential to have job satisfaction as stress levels are on
rise which
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the rise, which
the rise which
rises which
 have lead to a lot of office politics and health related issues in individuals. If people are content with their jobs they will be able to perform better which overall works in favour of organization and
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 leads to economic growth.
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 one can be healthy mentally as well as physically which helps improve
work
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 life balance.
Employeers
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Employees
 can engage their employees in social activities which will
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 help in reducing stress and fear amongst them improving overall happiness. In conclusion, it is crucial that working
inividuals
a human being
individuals
 are satisfied
in
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with
 their jobs as
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 will enable good performance at
work
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,
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,
 enhance their home front as they no longer feel
pressures
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the pressures
 of competition or risk loosing their jobs to potential candidates.
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 will indirectly propel the countries to move from a developing nation to a developed nation.

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