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Impact of the internet in creating informative society is dangerous for India's rich culture. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

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The internet is a medium which brings a world of
information
 at your feet. Some people argue that
information
 being readily available is detrimental to preserving India's culture. In my opinion, the free flow of
information
 is beneficial
for
Suggestion
to
 a
country
's culture
instead
 of being harmful. India is an amalgamation of diverse people and cultures which is one of the reasons it has a high influx of tourists. These tourists visit the
country
 after being exposed to
information
 about it from the media and internet. The tourism helps not only helps India take pride in their rich culture and is
also
 an intelligent way to advertise to the world what our
country
 is about.
Secondly
, it is likely that there exists a lot of misinformation about the
country
 on the internet.
However
, to combat
this
 misinformation, we need to use the same tool to make our voice be heard and write a real narrative of the
country
. To conclude, cultures are always evolving and their growth cannot be stopped. An
informative
Suggestion
information
informed
 society will
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