The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in 

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram illustrates the amount of male and female
in
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3 different dates in
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, who was in additional learning in which they were educating whole or specific
time
.
Overall
, the
part
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time
of
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extra learning is higher than full
time
for all in all different
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. The highest proportion of both types was reached by
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a woman
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woman
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women
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in 1990/91; and
also
,
man
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the man
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was reached to
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ratio in
the
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full
time
only. On the side of
specific
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a specific
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time
of
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education, the ratio of
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the male
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male
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males
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was higher than
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a female
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female
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females
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with around 300 thousand during the period 1970/71.addation in the
others
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periods the ratio of
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the male
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male
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males
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was slightly more than
female
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females
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by about 200000.
On the other hand
, the number of men
were
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evident more than
womens
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women
women's
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in 1970/71. But the number of
female
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was exceed the number of man in 1980/
81while
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81 while
in 1990/91 the statistics
of
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both was the same.
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