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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
An increasing growth of population and industrial revolution has been
adversly
in an adverse manner
adversely
 affecting the
environment
. It is argued that
tremendious improvement
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the tremendous improvement
tremendous improvement
 in
environement
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the environment
environment
 can be only made by government authorities and cooperate or big industries whereas it
can not
can not
cannot
 be done by
individivuals
a human being
individuals
 of the country. In my opinion, both parties play a key role in regard to save and enrich the surroundings.
Therefore
,
this
 essay will examine the roles of both
side
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sides
. On the one hand, it is
everyone
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everyone's
 responsibility to keep the surroundings well for all. Having said that, small
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of each one has been disturbing the balance of nature, which lead to the global warming.
For instance
,
significant number
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a significant number
 of people
has not stopped
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have not stopped
 their vehicle engine while they are waiting in
road
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the road
 due to traffic congestion.
As a result
, emission of
green house
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
 gas into
environment
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the environment
 is rising. On the whole, an individual action would impact the
environment
 either positive or negative way.
On the other hand
, steps should be taken to enhance the
environment
 at the macro level,
such
 as government, national and international organization, and
insititutes
set up or lay the groundwork for
institutes
.
This
 is because, people who are in the top level, are responsible to create the environmental protection law and policy. These are necessary to guide the citizen of country in
right direction
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the right direction
. In conclusion,
although
 it seems that micro level action has not
have
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had
 an impact on the
envioroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
, it
has still made
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still makes
 an enormous change as equal as government’s action.
Therefore
, I strongly
disagree the above
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disagree with the above
 mentioned statement.
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  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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