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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
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In 30 years the percentage of
home cooked
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food
 has
been
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decreased. In 1970, the budget spent on
resturant
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restaurant
meal
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meals
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 was 10%. In 1980, it got 15%. In 1990, it
incread
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increased
increases
 by 20% and got 35% and in 2000, the
home cooked
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meals
 and
restaurant
meals
 both were 50%. In 1970, 20
number of
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fast
food
meals
 and
sit down
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restaurant
meals
 were taken. In the
year
 1980,
sit down
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restaurant
meals
were
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increased
around
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 30 number of
meals
 per
year
 and fast
food
meals
 were
aroud
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around
 25 numbers of
meals
 per
year
, but after 1980 the fast
food
meals
 increased
more
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 than 80 number of
meals
 taken by people per
year
 and
sit down
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restaurant
meals
 were increased around till 40 numbers in the
year
 2000. People are considering more fast
food
meals
instead
 of
home cooked
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meals
 because they do not get time to cook in their busy
schedule
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. It can
also
effect
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affect
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 their health and get sick. Fast
food
meals
 can be eaten once
in
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a week but not regularly to maintain your health.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, meals, restaurant, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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