The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

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home cooked

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food

has

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decreased. In 1970, the budget spent on

resturant

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restaurant

meal

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was 10%. In 1980, it got 15%. In 1990, it

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increased

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by 20% and got 35% and in 2000, the

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meals

and

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both were 50%. In 1970, 20

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fast

food

meals

and

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restaurant

meals

were taken. In the

year

1980,

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restaurant

meals

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30 number of

meals

per

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food

meals

were

aroud

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around

25 numbers of

meals

per

year

, but after 1980 the fast

food

meals

increased

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than 80 number of

meals

taken by people per

year

and

sit down

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restaurant

meals

were increased around till 40 numbers in the

year

2000. People are considering more fast

food

meals

instead

home cooked

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meals

because they do not get time to cook in their busy

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. It can

also

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their health and get sick. Fast

food

meals

can be eaten once

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a week but not regularly to maintain your health.

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