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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
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In 30 years the percentage of
home cooked
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food
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been
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decreased. In 1970, the budget spent on
resturant
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restaurant
meal
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meals
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 was 10%. In 1980, it got 15%. In 1990, it
incread
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increased
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 by 20% and got 35% and in 2000, the
home cooked
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meals
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 and
restaurant
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meals
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 both were 50%. In 1970, 20
number of
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fast
food
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meals
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 and
sit down
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restaurant
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meals
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 were taken. In the
year
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 1980,
sit down
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restaurant
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meals
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were
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increased
around
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 30 number of
meals
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 per
year
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 and fast
food
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meals
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 were
aroud
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around
 25 numbers of
meals
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 per
year
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, but after 1980 the fast
food
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meals
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 increased
more
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 than 80 number of
meals
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 taken by people per
year
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 and
sit down
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restaurant
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meals
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 were increased around till 40 numbers in the
year
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 2000. People are considering more fast
food
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meals
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instead
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 of
home cooked
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meals
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 because they do not get time to cook in their busy
schedule
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. It can
also
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effect
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 their health and get sick. Fast
food
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meals
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 can be eaten once
in
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a week but not regularly to maintain your health.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, meals, restaurant, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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