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Some people make new friends on social sites and Internet chat rooms.Some people think it is a good thing .Some people think it is better to make friends face to face.Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #friends #sites #internet #chat #rooms #face
In
resent
new
recent
 years, governments focus on improving
this
 life
,
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,
 that would
being
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be
 a lot of benefit for citizens.
Such
 as communication
, transportation health
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, transportation, health
 care. Some arguments that built railways
is
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are
 more useful local people on than
road
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the road
. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is a good decision government
railways
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railway
 built.
First
 of all, it reduced
pollution
 when people give up driving to work
in
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on
 weekdays. Nowadays people lot of
spend
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spending
 a time on the
road
 in rush hour At the same time enthusiasm of car bring a
pollution
 in our environment. People easily get upset
it they
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it, they
 got into the traffic jam for
longtime
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a long time
long time
. Research has shown that get
pollution
 of air that
car
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the car
 stopped on the
road
 without cutting power.
Trainstation
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The train station
Train station
 is a good way to make easy that train never could get into congestion and
train
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the train
 is a public transport which is more helpful to reduce air
pollution
.
Secondly it
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Secondly, it
 solved congestion on the
road
 while many people commute by train, nearby years a number of car growing.
Traffic jam
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The traffic jam
A traffic jam
 is a horrible problem on the
road
.
Finally
 taking public transport is cheaper than
privatcal
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relating to or designed for or using the singing voice
vocal
vigil
. People could save money to do other they
intrested
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
. Overall,
government
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the government
pay
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pays
 more money building railway. It
being
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is
is being
 more it is a good decision that advantage than drawbacks.

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