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Families who send their children to private school should not be required to pay taxes that support the state educational system Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that there should be no obligation for parents of children who attend
private school
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private schools
a private school
 to contribute money to
society
. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
 conviction. On the one hand, there are several significant reasons why people should pay their taxes.
To begin
 with, taxation is compulsory for every individual, regardless of their social and economic status since every
people
Suggestion
person
 in
society
, even the upper classes as
this
 type of people could afford private schools' expenditures, might be in need
for
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of
 the community service,
therefore
, taxes are paid as a proportion of people's contribution to
society
 for their own sake.
Additionally
, governments should levy high taxes on rich people's income because they earn more money,
as a result
this
 class benefit from
society
's opportunities and facilities far more than the other classes, so it is logical to compensate for more advantages they get.
On the other hand
, there would be some issues by reducing taxes for families of whom children go to private school.
Firstly
,
this
 action is considered as a discrimination because the poor class who send their children to state school should bear the burden of affluent families and pay more taxes resulting in more poverty and crime.
Secondly
, the process of assessment of reduction amount is very complicated, for
this
 reason, it would require more work and effort in order to get the exact number which will be time and money consuming.
Consequently
, it is not a rational approach. In conclusion, In my
opinion
Accept comma addition
opinion, this
this
 statement which claims that people whose children
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrolled
 in private education could exclude from paying taxes.

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