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Education is very important. How can children who are disinterested in study be motivated to learn?

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Although
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knowledge
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 comes from various streams
,
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,
education
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 has proven to be the path to
knowledge
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. Losing the
interest
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 in
education
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 can be due to various reasons and understanding the reasons could pave way for better
education
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 for children.
Educational system
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The educational system
An educational system
 has evolved
in
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into
 an immense level. As
such
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 moving from real life learning
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 academic focus on teaching theoretical subjects in the recent days. Due to the change in
education
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,
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,
 children tend to lose
interest
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 as they are more classes oriented and not field oriented. Imparting
knowledge
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 in children should be drilled down to a more activity based
classes
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class
. So that children may understand the practical and theory behind the concept. Introducing new concepts through fun learning would make the child naturally to get interested and will be more focused.
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Thus maintaining
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Thus, maintaining
 the focus is the key in not losing
interest
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. Institutions can come up with various field works
,
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,
 camping and activities through which children can gain profound
knowledge
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.
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.
 Parents
also
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 should focus on the intellect of their child. Focusing on the grades would naturally create a competitive environment for
child
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the child
children
a child
 rather than imparting
education
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.
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focus
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the focus
 should lessen on the score card and more on the learning itself. Anything
that is
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 taught via an interesting method stays in the mind longer and lead to creative thinking ability. In Conclusion,
education
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 is not only the key in sustaining
life but
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life, but
 can be introduced efficiently and through creativity which not only sparks
interest
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 but pave
way
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the way
 for logical and analytical reasoning.

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