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Some people think that paper money and coins will be completely replaced by credit cards and online methods of payment in the near future.Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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In the contemporary era, there is heated argument over the issue that many individuals say that currency notes and coins will be totally
substitute
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substituted
 by plastic notes and online transactions in coming
time
.
in
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In
 my opinion.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 totally agree with the statement.The following paragraphs would cost light on my personal perspective a
long wide
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long, wide
 and opt example. To comments with the notion that,
first
 and foremost in
this
 modern
time
 with the assist of technological items some developing countries in the world totally replace the notes and coins.They prefer more cards and online transaction because it is easy and
convenience
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convenient
 for use.
Secondly
,
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,
the online transactions give plethora benefits to humans for shopping
onlineand
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online and
 purchasing goods which gives rewards and extra cashback facility.
As a result
, it is a
time
 saving process
instead
 of shopping from shops they waste
lot
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lots
 of
time
.Adding
furthermore
,
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,
express cards are
aid
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aiding
 people for safe precious wealth with them and it
is features
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features
 a without carry
notes currency
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notes, currency
 notes in pocket
,
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,
where the stolen of
money
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 cases are found. Even though, nowadays we
can really found
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can really find
swipe machine
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a swipe machine
 in every place for card transactions.
Thus
,
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,
it is a long lasting process because it will be
trend
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trending
 in coming future
.
Accept space
.
while
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While
,
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,
people mostly prefer
this
 method rather than using cash mode of payment. Hammering the
last
 nail that, I am personal opinion that,
this
 traditional method of payment in coming future is completely
venished
(of materials or goods) brought to the desired final state
finished
furnished
vanished
 out.Due to
this
 thing by looking the benefits of express cards and online transactions people will utilise
this
 method of
payment
Suggestion
paying
 more and more.
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