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Some people think it would be better for large companies and industries to move regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times we have seen that multinational companies have moved away from metropolitan cities and opened up their offices in tier two cities.
This
 move of shifting to outskirt locations has been highly debated because of its certain drawbacks.
However
, in my opinion, overall it is beneficial for the companies to relocate from metros. The main reason to relocate from a metro to an outskirt
location
 is to reduce the expenditure incurring from office rentals. As per the prevailing rentals, a 1000 square
feet
Suggestion
foot
 office in the
city
 hub costs 4 times more than that in a regional area.
Also
, having an office on the outskirts of the
city
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 saves commuting time by avoiding
city traffic
Suggestion
the city traffic
. Commuters can bypass the traffic and can reach directly through the highway. Sometimes it is imperative for some industries to shift outside of the
city
 because of government regulations. To illustrate, in the interest of public
safety government
Accept comma addition
safety, government
 has imposed heavy taxation on chemical producing factories which are operating
inside
Suggestion
in
 the
city forcing
Accept comma addition
city, forcing
 them to shift their operations outside at a remote
location
. Adequate infrastructure is a major limitation companies face in regional locations.
For example
, there are limited options to commute or inadequate power supply. Another hindrance that companies face because of shifting the
location
 is losing some of its employees. It is natural that the new
location
 is not suitable for some of the employees to commute on
daily basis
Suggestion
a daily basis
. To sum up, as a cost effective measure for the company and in the interest of public wellbeing the benefits of shifting companies or industries outside the
city
 clearly outweighs the hindrance
such
 as insufficient infrastructure or the employee attrition.

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