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The charts below show the percentage water used for different purposed in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage water used for different purposed in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts explain the
water
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usage
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rate
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 for various reasons in six continents of the world.
overall
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, areas
such
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 as South
America
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, Africa, Central, and Southeast
Asia
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 used
water
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 for agricultural purposes most preferably.
In contrast
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, North
America
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 and
Europe
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 had
significant
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a significant
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 portion of
water
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usage
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 in the industrial area.
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, in the case of the industrial context,
Europe
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 was at the highest peak, which is 53% of the whole
usage
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.
Similarly
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, North
America
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 was the
second
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 most(48%
rate
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) utilized. The proportion of 10% and 9% was acquired by South
America
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 and Africa respectively. Central
Asia
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 and Southeast
Asia
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 were at the same
rate
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 i.e 7%. In terms of household activities, South
America
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 took up 19
percent
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per cent
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 of
water
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.
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,
Europe
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 and North
America
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 had 15% and 13% of the
water
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usage
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rate
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 respectively.
Finally
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, Africa, South
America
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, Central, and South
Asia
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 were more inclined to
using
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use
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water
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 for agricultural reasons, being the widest
water
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 used
overall
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.
Europe
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 has more than a quarter(32%) of
water
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usage
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, rate, america, asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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