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Some people believe that young people know about international pop a movie star but know very little about famous people from history in their own country. Why is this? How can more interest be created in young people to gain more knowledge about their own famous people in history

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Today’s generation is more indulged on the internet, where they encounter various things. But they tend to be drawn more towards the
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 are unaware of the contributor to the society due to a couple of reasons like lack of awareness or lack of knowledge. Any individual needs to have more than a little knowledge about the seminal person of the society he/she dwells. The children in today’s century find the influential people to be mundane.
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 is because of the lack of
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 into them. The very former to counter
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 to introduce a history class in their curriculum, making it compulsory for any student to learn will shower them with facts
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 the country. The children who are new to the subject may get stunned with the struggle the fighter went through. Specifically for India, The children might not know the bloodshed in the fight for the independence of the country and forgetting the leaders would be a shame to the nation. By arranging different events and stage play, awareness should be spread in schools.
Secondly
, if possible, patriotic movies shall be released yearly by the
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a producer of motion pictures
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, so young people can get to know passively without getting bored.
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, many historic days like Independence Day, Republic Day, and Gandhi Jayanti should be celebrated in the whole nation by carrying out parades and by broadcasting various patriotic movies on the TV.
In addition
, posters and banners can augment the event and the importance of the day. In conclusion, the spreading of awareness by stating the facts and history of famous people can be much helpful to children.
This
 is by knowing the past of the country and the people who contributed to the society, the information can be passed on to the
next
 generation so that the revolutionary contribution does not go in vain.

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