Many people belive that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies . Others claim , that men are just as good as women at parenting

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Children in
developing country
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developing countries
are healthy and most likely enthusiastic. Parental responsibilities and roles are very important for the parents to raise their children's for
future
. A one question
arise
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arises
which is very debatable question that women are the better parents
then
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than
men and for
this
reason
also
women have greater role in hoisting them up
.
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.
While some people argue that man stood
at
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in
the same position as women do
.
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.
In my opinion
,
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,
children need affection and care for from
both
mother and
father
. Their roles are simultaneous in raising them. Women are considered of having more patience than
man
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men
a man
, to handle children better during the infancy
.
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.
Women
usually spends
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usually spend
more
time
with their children than men because, in many countries they are usually less engaged in working.
women
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Women
have proven themselves as superior parents
as a result
of their condition
,
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,
their less aggressive nature and generally they are good at communicating with kids. Mahendra main busy at their
works most
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works, most
of the
time
, but women have lots of spare
time
to share with their children. From the
time
they are little girls
,
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,
females learn about nurturing
.
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.
First
with dolls and later perhaps with younger brothers and sisters.
Also
,
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,
girls are more patient and less aggressive than boys in adulthood. Obviously, raising children, a more
patient gentle
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patient, gentle
manner is preferable than a more aggressive one.
genetically
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Genetically
, women can be socially active and communicate better with their
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
then
the man can.
this
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This
is not to say that men are not of importance in children caring and they do not know their kids. When have been more responsible to their family
financially
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financed
, so they can transfer their experience to the children far better than the women can. Fathers are usually more serious in punishing their children than mothers, so they can control better the children avoid crime.
comparatively
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Comparatively
, fathers are more educated and have a diverse knowledge and experience
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
mothers, from that they can better prepare the children's
future
. Mens contribution in child development is found more effective when it comes to imbibing discipline.
truemans
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Tremendous
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wisdom and knowledge their children can be
prepare
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prepared
to place their food in
this
savi
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Savi
severe
world.
Also
,
father
's are termed as their ideal person for children. Fathers are often a source of inspiration for children on how to be a strong and a better person in life.
This
helps them to grow as better and responsible citizen
future
.
in
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In
my opinion, a kid needs the affection on caring of
both
father
and
mother they
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mother, they both
both
have qualities that should be learn
by
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from
their kids. Fathers can give knowledge about their growing and fast world, how to sustain in it and how to live a healthy and quality life while, mothers can teach household work which can be helpful in
future
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the future
to become independent.
to conclude
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To conclude, both
To conclude both
both
women and men are equally important. Even if the proportion is not balanced, there will be a use impact on the children. So
both
father
and mother hold a major role in the family.

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