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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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The graph describes how the purpose of
water
 usage worldwide changes during the 20th century, it
also show
Suggestion
also shows
 how contrast the
water
 allocated to each
person
 in Brazil and Congo. About the worldwide usage,
then
amount
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the amount
 of
water
 used has increased strongly at the end of the period in all three categories. During the four decades, people used
water
 for industry and household almost the same, while they used it in agriculture twice times as much as in 1900. In the
next
 20 years,
agriculture
Suggestion
the agriculture water amount
water
 amount
begined
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
began
 to surge up to 1.000 km3, the other two aspects
also
 started seeing a slight rise but still less than 200 km3. The remaining period of the century has witnessed a dramatic growth in all three purposes, the
water
 used for agriculture has
blast
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blasted
 up to 3.000 km3,
similarly
 the industrial
water
 shot up to more than 1.200 m3; the domestic usage of
water
only use
Suggestion
only uses
 up about 300 m3.
However
 the
water
 amount has
increase
Suggestion
increased
 in all purpose, there still is an intense difference between the developed and
the poor
Suggestion
poorest
 country. As the table shows, each
person
 in Congo only has 8m3 of
water
 to use while one
person
 in Brazil has 120 times as much to use, which is 359 m3 per
person
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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