The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph reveals striking information about the average
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dioxide
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emissions
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per person in four different countries over a period of 40 years.
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, the
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emitted by
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kingdom
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remains the highest between 1967 to 2007.
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,
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and Sweden saw a considerable decrease in their
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,
in contrast
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, Italy and Portugal increased their
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during these 40 years. In the year 1967, Portugal emitted nearly 1 metric tonne of
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,
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, in comparison,
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emitted 12 times more
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. By 2007,
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emitted by
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plunged to nearly 9 metric tonnes and a contrasting trend was followed by Italy and Portugal where the
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were
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increased by 2-5 metric tonnes
overall
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. Another interesting fact highlighted by the charts is the fact that
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, in 1967, Sweden's
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were nearly 9 times
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Portugal's, by the year 2007, both
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countries produced the same amount of
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, emissions, kingdom with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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