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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that develop the mind, such as reading and doing crossword puzzles. Others feel that it is important to give one’s mind a rest in leisure time. Discuss.

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As we are human we naturally need to rest
on
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at
for
 leisure
time
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 to recover
thestress
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the stress
 of
work
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 and everyday life. In fact, every individual need to do what they want and belong to them. Personally, I prefer to be active during
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time
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 because it
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feels
 right to me better.
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, people are free for what they do
on
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in
with
 their leisure
time
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, and nobody can say what it is the best. Some people want to relax after their day of
work
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. These people may prefer to relax by watching movies, reading or getting a massage. People who have a
physically
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physical
jobs
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job
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 as doctors, teachers and builders may choose these types of activities. If you are a doctor, you may feel that you want to let your body rest after
work
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 and you don’t want to do a five
kilometer
a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)
kilometre
 run after
work
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, because you are already physically tired.
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, some people choose to be active in their leisure
time
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 because they do very sitting jobs.
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, these
people many
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people, many
 spend all day sitting on a chair and do their
work
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. At the end of a working day, they may
be have
behave in a certain manner; show a certain behavior; conduct or comport oneself
behave
 a backache, and all of their body become tired so they need to stretch their arms and improve their health by doing some activity
such
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 as going to the gym or swimming.
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