Children from 7-11 now spend more time watching television and playing video games than before. What are the effects of this on children, families and society? What are the possible solutions to this problem?

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Children at
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a young age
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in the present spend more
time
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on watching
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broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
or they play
video
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games.In the past it was only playing cricket or some outdoor games.As the technology increases and the children are more attracted by
video
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games or some animated shows to watch on television.
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It is often seen that there are many effects to children as it is the young
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where they gain more knowledge
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develop good communication
skills but
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skills, but
rather they become
couch potato
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a couch potato
couch potatoes
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become so addicted that they don'
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care even there is a fire in the house.The family who has so
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many
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of
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of them or themselves
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child
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children
once they are big and earn more
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money, but
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waste most of the
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doing
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useless things.
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effects
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living hood
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the kids at present generations are
future leaders
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the future leaders
if don'
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focus on
studies
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studies, then
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the economy could go down and in future they would face difficulties if they don'
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nurture right from childhood.
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,
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though there are no permanent solutions for stopping children from
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watching, however
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parents can take the responsibility of limiting
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activities for a shorter
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.Spend more
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children play
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children, play
with them distract them from playing
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games.Let them watch
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gain more information on watching global news or discovery channel rather than movies or serials etc.Allowing them to go and play outdoor games basically parents need to keep the child busy with many other activities which can develop their mental ability and skills.
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a child at the
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of 10 can
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do coding and his I.Q level is noted as the highest level for his
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.To bring up more
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children we
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children, we
need to take every step carefully help them in developing more skills and learn new innovative ideas than wasting the
time
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on useless
video
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games. In the conclusion
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I would say that parents need to concentrate more on their kids and make them learn knowledge right from
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a young age
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and probably not having any television or
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games at home
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have more books and games which increases their memory power to help them perform better with improving knowledge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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