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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is frequently argued by some people that employees should dress appropriately while others believe that the quality of the
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 is more important.
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 essay will discuss both the views if dressing or quality of
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 which more beneficial for the companies. In my opinion, I believe that dress of an employee depends on the type of
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 he does and if he is good in that
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 he must be valued. On the one hand, having proper neat and clean attire in office is a great way of showing respect towards the
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. It displays professionalism of the worker and helps him to build a confidence and a sense of trust in the minds of his employers and client. To give a clear example, of a lawyer is wearing a beach clothing like T-shirt and short pant during his courtroom trial will not only detriment his value
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 it shows he doesn't value his profession.
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, not every job type requires to have a suit and tie, it depends how the worker performs his duty.
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, if a construction
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 is drilling the road wearing a nice suit and shiny pair of boot, wearing
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 clothes he cannot
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 properly but
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 his cloths will get dirty.
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, people doing menial
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 cannot afford to buy branded clothes. In conclusion, wearing an appropriate clothing during the job is preferred by some organisations while others look at the skills. I believe people should be free to decide their attire at
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 as it depends on the type of
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 while employers should look at the skills and dedication of the employees

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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