The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of people who visited four
diffent
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different
touist
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tourist
place
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places
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in Britain during
year
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the year
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1999. The table show percentage of people who visited 5
theme
park during
same
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the same
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year.
Overall
, it can be seen that
theme
park was the most famous tourist attraction
while
wildlife
parks
and zoos had the lowest percentage during 1999.
According to
the survey,
theme
park
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parks
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, museums and
galleris
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galleries
were the most popular destinations. They both in all contributed to more than 60
percent
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per cent
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where
theme
parks
had 38
percent
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per cent
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where as 37
percent
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per cent
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was of museums and galleries. Historic houses and Monuments had 16%
while
wildlife
parks
and zoos
was
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were
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the
most
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least favourite tourist spot it was only 9%. AS
theme
parks
had the highest
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number of visiters
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visiters
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visitors
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but only Blackpool Pleasure Beach had the most significant proportion which is 47
percent
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per cent
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where
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whereas
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legoland
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in
windsor
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Windsor
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and
chessington
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Chessington
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world of adventures were the lowest with 10
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words theme, parks, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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