The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of people who visited four

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in Britain during

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1999. The table show percentage of people who visited 5

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park during

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year.

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, it can be seen that

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park was the most famous tourist attraction

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and zoos had the lowest percentage during 1999.

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the survey,

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, museums and

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galleries

were the most popular destinations. They both in all contributed to more than 60

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where

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parks

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had 38

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where as 37

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was of museums and galleries. Historic houses and Monuments had 16%

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and zoos

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least favourite tourist spot it was only 9%. AS

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parks

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had the highest

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but only Blackpool Pleasure Beach had the most significant proportion which is 47

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world of adventures were the lowest with 10

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Vocabulary: Replace the words theme, parks, percent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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155 words

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The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more

In the last century the first man to walk on the moon said it was a great step for mankind. But in fact space travel has made little difference to most people lives today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries today, both men and women need to work full time. Therefore, some people think men and women should share household takes equally (eg. cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?