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You have recently moved into a company accommodation and you are facing some issues at the place. Write a letter to your HR department. In the letter, mention: • A brief description of your accommodation. • What problems are you facing? • What do you expect the company to do about it?

#company #accommodation #place #hr #department #description
I am writing
this
 letter to let you know about the problems that I am facing
in
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with
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 the accommodation provided by our organization in Buena Park, Los Angeles city. I was given a 1 bhk apartment which has
hall
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a hall
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, bathroom, kitchen and balcony. When I came to
this
 flat for the
first
 time I was quite impressed by
surroundings
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the surroundings
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 and infrastructure of the building.
However
, there are some problems I am facing in
this
 flat. When I try to switch on AC it is not turning on. In
washroom
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 water is not coming for some times in a day. When I turn on
stove
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the stove
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 to cook food it
is not lighten
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 up. These are the basic needs of a human for a day to day life. As a consequence, it is very difficult for me to stay in
this
 flat. I expect you to either shifting me to
other
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another
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 accommodation where all the facilities are working or making the facilities in
this
flat work
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flatwork
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 right. I hope you take immediate action towards these problems I am facing and help me out as soon as possible. Thank you.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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